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- Some very good analysis of the music videos. With specific examples used to illustrate your points.
-A relatively low amount of waffle!
- Good visual examples included for most of your posts.
- Range of different music videos. These are clearly well chosen and you've included YouTube versions with each entry. This is good.
EBI.
-Although you do have some good analysis, it would be better if you had somewhat more. Expand your entries, particularly the one on the Red Hot Chili Peppers: it doesn't go into enough detail.
- Check your entries over before you submit them, there is one case where a sentence does not begin with a capital letter, and you use the word "pycotic", by which I think you mean psychotic?
- One way to do the analysis which may provide more insight is to divide it up into the micro-elements, and then come up with an example for each of them.
- You need to write up the entry on your progress from Year 12 into Year 13.
Effort: GD
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